My-IELTS-subjective

题目

按照这个模板，写一个只有简单词汇的范文吧，不超过300词，告诉我写作思路，其中的好的句式和好词进行标注(用``进行标注)和分析，最后做出总结，去除作文的话题词，输出当前作文的对应的模板。

范文

好的，我们开始吧！非常高兴看到你已经准备好了学习资料，这说明你对攻克地图题有很强的决心。这正是我们成功的第一步。

今天，我们就以你提供的这张 Porth Harbour 的地图为例，运用你上传的模板和技巧，写一篇简洁、高效、拿高分的范文。

第一步：我的写作思路 (My Writing Process)

在我动笔之前，我的大脑会像这样快速运转：

审题与定位 (Analyze & Orient):
- 什么东西？ 两张地图，展示一个叫 “Porth Harbour” 的地方。
- 时间跨度？ 从 2000 年到 “today” (今天)。
- 核心任务？ 描述主要变化 (main features and changes) 并进行对比 (make comparisons)。
寻找主要变化 (Find Key Changes):
- 新增了什么？
  - Cafés & shops (咖啡馆和商店)
  - Hotel (酒店)
  - 南边多了一组 Showers & toilets (淋浴和厕所)
- 消失了什么？
  - 北边的一组 Showers & toilets
  - Castle (disused) (废弃的城堡)
  - 南边的 Public beach (公共海滩) -> 变成了 Private beach (私人海滩)
- 位置移动了什么？
  - Marina (游艇码头) 和 Fishing boats (渔船区) 的位置互换了。
  - Lifeboat (救生船) 的位置微调了。
- 什么没变？
  - Main road (主路)
  - 两个 Car park (停车场)
  - Dock (码头)
  - Passenger ferries (客运渡轮)
规划段落 (Plan Paragraphs):
- 引言： 改写题目。
- 总览： 总结一句整体变化：这个港口 has become more modern and tourist-focused (变得更现代化、更侧重于旅游业了)。
- 主体段1 (西侧变化): 描述地图左半边的变化。这里最明显的是渔船区和游艇码头的互换，以及淋浴设施的增减。把这些放在一起说，逻辑最清晰。
- 主体段2 (东侧与南侧变化): 描述地图右半边的变化。这里主要是城堡变酒店，公共海滩变私人海滩，以及新增了商店。最后，提一下那些没变的东西作为补充。
选择时态与语态 (Choose Tense & Voice):
- 因为是从过去 (2000) 到现在 (today) 的变化，现在完成时的被动语态 (has been + 动词过去分词) 是我们的“万能钥匙”。例如，The castle has been demolished.

好了，思路清晰了，现在我们可以开始写作了。

第二步：范文演示 (Sample Essay)

The two maps illustrate the main changes that have taken place at Porth Harbour between the year 2000 and the present day.

Overall, it is clear that the harbour has undergone a significant transformation, with the development of new facilities for tourism and leisure. The area has become much more commercialized and developed.

Looking at the western side, the most notable change is the relocation of the boating facilities. The area for fishing boats has been moved to the north-west, replacing the original showers and toilets. In turn, the marina for private yachts has been relocated to the space formerly occupied by the fishing boats. To accommodate this change, new showers and toilets have been constructed next to the new marina.

On the eastern and southern side of the harbour, there have also been major developments. The disused castle in the south-east has been demolished and replaced by a new hotel. As a result, the adjacent public beach has been converted into a private beach. Furthermore, a new row of cafés and shops has been constructed near the lifeboat. In contrast, several features, such as the two car parks and the passenger ferry dock, have remained unchanged throughout the period.

(194 words)

第三步：好词好句分析 (Language Analysis)

你看，这篇范文没有用任何“高深”的词汇，但它非常清晰、准确。我们来看看里面有哪些值得你学习和模仿的“加分点”：

have taken place: 一个非常地道和书面的短语，用来替换 “happened” 或 “occurred”，用在引言里非常合适。
has undergone a significant transformation: 这是总览段的“黄金句型”。undergo a transformation (经历一场变革) 比 “has changed a lot” 要高级得多。
has been moved / relocated / demolished / replaced by / converted into / constructed: 这些都是描述“变化”的完美动词，而且都用了我们前面提到的被动语态。为什么用被动？因为我们不关心“谁”拆了城堡，我们只关心“城堡被拆了”这个事实。这是地图题写作的核心精髓。
replacing...: 这里用动词的-ing形式，让句子连接更紧凑、更流畅。它比写 “and it replaced…” 要简洁。
To accommodate this change: 这个短语用来解释一个变化的“目的”。意思是“为了适应这个变化”。这能体现你对两个变化之间逻辑关系的理解。
have remained unchanged: 这是地图题的另一个“加分利器”。在描述完所有变化之后，提一下没有变的地方，能向考官展示你观察的全面性。

第四步：总结与你的专属模板 (Summary & Your Template)

总结一下，写好一篇地图题作文，关键在于：

结构清晰： 严格遵循“引言-总览-主体段”的结构。
逻辑分组： 主体段按照区域（如东/西，南/北）来写，是最不容易出错的方法。
时态准确： 熟练运用“现在完成时被动语态”。
动词丰富： 掌握描述“增/删/改/换/移”的核心动词。
观察全面： 不仅要看到“变”的，也要看到“不变”的。

现在，我将上面这篇范文去除所有具体地名和设施，为你生成一个可以直接套用的“专属模板”：

【引言】 The two maps illustrate the main changes that have taken place in [地点名称] between [年份1] and [年份2/today].

【总览】 Overall, it is clear that the area has undergone a significant transformation, with the development of new [总结性名词, e.g., residential / commercial / tourist] facilities.

【主体段一：描述区域A】 Looking at the [区域A，如：western side], the most notable change is the relocation of [设施A]. The [旧设施A] has been moved / relocated to [新位置], replacing the original [被取代的设施B]. In turn, [新设施C] has been relocated / constructed in the space formerly occupied by [旧设施A].

【主体段二：描述区域B + 不变之处】 On the [区域B，如：eastern side], there have also been major developments. The [旧建筑A] in the [方位] has been demolished and replaced by a new [新建筑B]. As a result, the adjacent [设施D] has been converted into [新设施E]. Furthermore, [新设施F] has been constructed near [参照物]. In contrast, several features, such as the [不变的设施1] and [不变的设施2], have remained unchanged throughout the period.

现在，你感觉是不是清晰多了？记住，写作就像搭积木，先把框架搭好，再用准确的词汇和句型去填充，一篇好的作文就诞生了。

接下来你有什么问题，或者想学习哪个新的写作知识点，随时都可以告诉我！

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