My-IELTS-subjective
题目
按照这个模板，写一个简单的范文吧，告诉我写作思路，其中的好的句式和好词进行标注(用``进行标注)和分析，最后做出总结，去除作文的话题词，输出当前作文的对应的模板。
范文
好的，没问题！非常欣赏你提出的“用自己能 100%驾驭的语言，去填充一个 100%有逻辑的结构”这个理念，这正是通往写作高分的康庄大道。
今天我们就以这个“缩短工作周”的题目为例，用你提供的 P-C-C-E-L 框架 来写一篇简洁、清晰、高分的范文。
1. 写作思路（Brainstorming & Outlining）
在动笔之前，我们先快速地规划一下。这就像建房子前先画好蓝图。
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审题：
- 话题： The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. (工作周应该缩短，工人应该有更长的周末。)
- 问题： Do you agree or disagree? (你同意还是不同意？)
- 我的立场： 同意。这个立场更容易找到对个人和公司都有利的论点。
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搭建大纲 (Outline):
- 引言： 介绍背景（关于工作方式的讨论很普遍） -> 改写题目 -> 亮出我的观点（我同意），并预告两个理由：1. 对员工好；2. 对公司也好。
- 主体段 A (P-C-C-E-L):
- Point (观点): 对员工好，可以改善他们的身心健康。 (观点来自万能观点库 -> 生活类 -> 观点 4：人们越来越重视身心健康)
- Cause (原因): 因为传统的工作模式压力太大，休息时间不足。
- Consequence (结果): 更长的周末能让他们充分休息、陪伴家人，从而提升生活质量。
- Example (例子): 比如，可以利用多出来的一天去远足，或者看望父母。
- Link (链接): 因此，这对提升员工幸福感至关重要。
- 主体段 B (P-C-C-E-L):
- Point (观点): 对公司好，可以提升生产效率。
- Cause (原因): 因为休息好的员工在工作时更专注、更有活力。
- Consequence (结果): 这会让他们用更少的时间完成同样甚至更多的工作，减少错误。
- Example (例子): 很多试行四天工作制的科技公司发现，员工的创造力和效率都提升了。
- Link (链接): 所以，这对公司来说也是一个明智的商业决策。
- 结论： 再次声明我的观点 -> 总结两个主体段的理由 -> 提出一个简单的展望或建议。
你看，思路清晰了，接下来往框架里填内容就非常简单了。
2. 7.5 分范文（简洁版）
The discussion about the ideal structure of a workweek has become increasingly common in modern society. The proposal that people should work fewer days and enjoy longer weekends is gaining support. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with this view, because it offers significant benefits not only to employees but also to their employers.
First and foremost, a shorter working week is crucial for improving the well-being of workers. The main reason for this is that the traditional five-day schedule can impose considerable pressure on individuals, leaving them with insufficient time for rest and personal life. As a consequence, a three-day weekend would allow people to fully recharge, spend quality time with their families, and pursue their hobbies. For instance, an office worker could use the extra day to go hiking or visit relatives, activities that help alleviate stress. Hence, it is clear that this change can significantly enhance an employee’s quality of life.
Furthermore, this policy can, perhaps surprisingly, boost a company's productivity. This can be attributed to the fact that well-rested employees are generally more focused and motivated during their working hours. As a result, they can complete their tasks more efficiently, often producing the same or even better outcomes in less time. A compelling illustration of this is the growing number of companies that have trialed a four-day workweek and reported a noticeable increase in staff creativity and a reduction in errors. Thus, this evidence suggests that a shorter workweek is also a sensible business strategy.
In conclusion, I reaffirm my conviction that shortening the workweek is a positive step forward. Based on the clear advantages for both employee wellness and corporate efficiency, it is a change that deserves serious consideration from policymakers and business leaders alike.
(Word Count: 288 words)
3. 好词好句分析
这篇范文没有使用任何生僻词，而是用简单、准确的词组来表达清晰的逻辑。
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has become increasingly common- 分析： 这是一个非常地道且万能的背景句开头，意为“变得越来越普遍”。它比 “is very common” 更有动态感和学术感。
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crucial for improving- 分析： “Crucial for” (对…至关重要) 是一个比 “very important for” 更高级的表达，能有效强调你观点的重要性。
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impose considerable pressure- 分析： “施加巨大的压力”。”Impose” 是一个非常书面化的动词，”considerable” (相当大的) 比 “great” 或 “a lot of” 更显正式。这是简单词汇的漂亮升级。
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fully recharge- 分析： “满血复活”、“充分充电”。这是一个很形象的词组，用来描述休息带来的效果，生动而不口语化。
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alleviate stress- 分析： “缓解压力”。”Alleviate” 是 “reduce” 或 “relieve” 的一个更正式、更精确的同义词，是 7 分作文的标志性词汇之一。
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Hence, it is clear that...- 分析： 这是 P-C-C-E-L 模型中 L (Link) 环节的经典句型。用 “Hence” (因此) 来引出小结，比用 “So” 要正式得多。
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boost a company's productivity- 分析： “提升公司的生产力”。”Boost” (促进，提升) 是一个非常有力且简洁的动词，比 “increase” 或 “improve” 更具冲击力。
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a noticeable increase in- 分析： “一个显著的增长”。”Noticeable” (显著的，显而易见的) 准确地描述了变化是可见的，比 “big” 更具体。
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sensible business strategy- 分析： “明智的商业策略”。”Sensible” (明智的，合理的) 体现了你的判断，说明这个策略是经过理性思考的，比 “good” 更具说服力。
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employee wellness and corporate efficiency- 分析： “员工福祉和公司效率”。这是对两个主体段核心观点的精准概括。”Wellness” 和 “efficiency” 都是非常书面化的名词。
4. 本文对应的“万能写作模板”
现在，我们把这篇文章里的“话题词”都抽掉，剩下的就是你可以直接套用到其他“同意/不同意”类型文章的模板了。
引言 (Introduction)
The discussion about [宏观话题] has become increasingly common in modern society. The proposal that [转述题目中的观点] is gaining support. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with this view, because it offers significant benefits not only to [受益方A] but also to [受益方B].
主体段 A (Body Paragraph A)
First and foremost, [分论点一]. The main reason for this is that [解释原因]. As a consequence, [阐述带来的直接结果]. For instance, [举一个具体的例子来支撑结果]. Hence, it is clear that [重申分论点一的重要性].
主体段 B (Body Paragraph B)
Furthermore, [分论点二]. This can be attributed to the fact that [解释原因]. As a result, [阐述带来的直接结果]. A compelling illustration of this is [举一个具体的例子来支撑结果]. Thus, this evidence suggests that [重申分论点二的合理性].
结论 (Conclusion)
In conclusion, I reaffirm my conviction that [重申你的总观点]. Based on the clear advantages for both [总结理由一] and [总结理由二], it is a change that deserves serious consideration from [相关决策者，如policymakers/individuals/society].
希望这次的拆解和范文对你有帮助！你可以试着用这个模板去思考其他的作文题目，看看是否能快速地理清思路。我们下次再见！